雅思寫(xiě)作：開(kāi)篇“十大坑”，你進(jìn)去過(guò)嗎？

從小到大，老師在教我們寫(xiě)作文的時(shí)候都曾說(shuō)過(guò)“寫(xiě)作文一定要在開(kāi)頭，讓人眼前一亮”，同理在雅思寫(xiě)作中也是這個(gè)道理，要不然縱你技巧滿滿，仍是萬(wàn)年5.5。那么今天我們就來(lái)看看那些年你在作文開(kāi)頭踩過(guò)的坑！

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十、內(nèi)容過(guò)分簡(jiǎn)單

討厭指數(shù)：★★

考官想給你打分都沒(méi)有內(nèi)容，所以切記開(kāi)頭不要只寫(xiě)一兩句話。比如：

寫(xiě)作主題

The importance of environmental protection

案例：This issue is surely very important,let’s talk about it!

九、用詞不當(dāng)

討厭指數(shù)：★★

用詞不當(dāng)會(huì)暴露你的詞匯，而且評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中談到“在不同的語(yǔ)境中，使用正確的詞性；”所以在使用詞匯的時(shí)候，正確性也是非常重要的。比如：

寫(xiě)作主題

Should college students be allowed to get married?

案例：I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.

八、觀點(diǎn)不明朗

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雅思大作文很重要的一點(diǎn)就是你的邏輯性和觀點(diǎn)，如果觀點(diǎn)都不明確，后面的舉例證明等都會(huì)缺乏說(shuō)服力，自然分?jǐn)?shù)也不會(huì)高。比如：

寫(xiě)作主題

Should college students be allowed to get married?

案例：I think this topic is very hard to say.Because I am still very little,only 17,and not married,so this topic is very difficult for me……

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七、語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多

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涉及到雅思寫(xiě)作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中的語(yǔ)法多樣性和準(zhǔn)確性，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤不斷自然會(huì)成為扣分點(diǎn)。比如：

寫(xiě)作主題

If children behave badly,should their parents acceptresponsibility and also be punished?

案例：About this problem,my think is if children behave badly,then parents arenot right.Because teach child is parent’s responsibility.

六、意思反復(fù)重復(fù)

討厭指數(shù)：★★★

反復(fù)重復(fù)一個(gè)意思，讓考官會(huì)覺(jué)得你并沒(méi)有什么可以表達(dá)的，或者詞匯表達(dá)能力有限，自然也會(huì)扣分。比如：

寫(xiě)作主題

Your opinion on DINK families

案例：My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing.And it is a bad thing.It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.

五、觀點(diǎn)絕對(duì)化

討厭指數(shù)：★★★

考生在使用語(yǔ)言描述事物或者表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，應(yīng)盡可能避免語(yǔ)言過(guò)于絕對(duì)化，更應(yīng)該注意該語(yǔ)言中非絕對(duì)化表達(dá)方式的學(xué)習(xí)，這樣才能盡顯文章內(nèi)容的客觀性。比如：

寫(xiě)作主題1

The importance of confidence

案例：In my opinion,confidence is the most important thing for a person.All the successful people in the world are full of confidence.While those people who don’t have confidence,they all have failed.

寫(xiě)作主題2

The solution to the traffic problem

案例：I think to solve the traffic problem,very easy!For those who don’t obey the traffic rules,we should put all of them into prison.If we do that,I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.

四、超級(jí)啰嗦

討厭指數(shù)：★★★★

開(kāi)篇就要主題明了清晰，上來(lái)就啰啰嗦嗦表達(dá)不清，考官自然認(rèn)為你的觀點(diǎn)模糊，甚至不會(huì)表達(dá)。比如：

寫(xiě)作主題1

Should college students be allowed to get married?

案例：This topic is very interesting.I’m very interested in talking about this topic.Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……

寫(xiě)作主題2

Will modern technology,such as the Internet,ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information?

案例：Ok,this topic is a very good topic.First,let me tell you a story:I have a friend,he likes go on the internet very much.Every day,he uses internet to read news or play internet games.So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.

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三、偏離主題

討厭指數(shù)：★★★★

文不對(duì)題自然會(huì)扣分，給考官留下跑題的印象，想想你的寫(xiě)作分?jǐn)?shù)還會(huì)高么？比如：

寫(xiě)作主題

It is said that nowadays one can‘t acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education.To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

案例：I think to success,we must have a lot of important qualities.To have these important qualities,we must learn a lot of things,for example,English,music tools,and etc.We can learn these qualities from our teachers,our friends and from books.All in all,we can learn from many places.

二、亂譯中國(guó)俗語(yǔ)

討厭指數(shù)：★★★★★

胡亂翻譯中國(guó)俗語(yǔ)會(huì)起反作用，畢竟考官對(duì)中國(guó)俗語(yǔ)并不“感冒”，不僅不懂還會(huì)引起考官反感。比如：

寫(xiě)作主題1

Is it good to have a large family?

案例：I think it is good to have a large family.Because we Chinese believe a sentence:“Many sons,many lucks”……

寫(xiě)作主題2

Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?

案例：Chinese old words says very good:Dragon born dragon,phoenix born phoenix,rat’s son can make hole……

寫(xiě)作主題3

The advantage of being a nice person

案例：I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”.We Chinese people always say:“Good has good pay,bad has bad pay”.

一、中式英語(yǔ)

討厭指數(shù)：★★★★★

用中式英文開(kāi)頭，不僅考官看不懂，還暴露了你的語(yǔ)言功底，語(yǔ)料積累匱乏可是雅思寫(xiě)作中的大忌。比如：

寫(xiě)作主題1

The happiest moment in your life

案例：In our life,there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……

寫(xiě)作主題2

The population problem

案例：The population problem is a very big problem.For example,in the city centers of Shanghai,we can always see people mountain people sea there.

寫(xiě)作主題3

Is there fairness in today’s business world?

案例：I think in today’s society,there is no fairness in the business world.For example,I always chopped when I go out buy things……

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